Nardvark likes to think of himself as a pretty bad-ass writer. He wrote a thrilling adventure story for the IGCSE composition exam, which you can read here and see how it's graded here.
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However, Nerdvark thinks he can do better... so it's on!
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Nerdvark chooses "Descriptive writing" question (a) for his challenge piece:
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Nerdvark thinks he can write better.... |
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Nerdvark chooses "Descriptive writing" question (a) for his challenge piece:
Descriptive writing questions from 2012 IGCSE English Language May/June writing paper |
Nerdvark knows that to get top marks, he must follow the mark scheme for CONTENT AND STRUCTURE:
and for STYLE AND ACCURACY:
More on marking next time. For now let's see what Nerdvark writes:
After six days
shipwrecked and living at the mercy of the tumultuous sea alone in a tiny raft,
the hard weedy sand under my feet was as welcome as a Starbucks café. I never
thought I would do it, but as soon as I had crawled out of the water, I dropped
to my knees and kissed the white salty beach below me.
Tiny black crabs
scuttled for shelter under the sun-bleached rocks that encircled the small cove
I had landed in. From the position of my shadow and the glaring sun overhead, I
judged it to be mid day, though the days on the raft had started to stretch
into an unimaginable epoch. Exhausted and relieved, with the sound of the
gentle sea behind me and the breezes gusting through the palm trees in front
lulling me, I merely sat on my knees and took it all in.
Up above the small
beach I sat upon was a dark rocky horseshoe-shaped outcropping; it would provide
a good shelter. Beyond that, a dense forest of palms and other fruit trees
swayed lackadaisically in the island breezes. The bright yellow dates hanging
in great bunches beckoned me, making my mouth water with the thought of their
flavour - heavy, robust, sweet dates, hanging there like beacons.
Just then the tranquility was shattered by a whizzing that shot past my ear. Was it an insect? Another
whiz and a stinging sharp pain in my thigh - instinctually I smacked at it, but
it was no wasp. My hand knocked a home-made dart out of my leg, which was followed
by a rivulet of blood.
Shooting my eyes
around among the trees and rocks, I could not see my assailants, but no more
darts came. I did, however, hear voices speaking in a strange language made up
of sounds I did not recognise. The gurgles and booms they spoke sounded like
many wounded soldiers crying out in a WWII hospital dorm.
My vision was becoming
blurred and my ears muffled, but at last they approached me, the people of this
island. A small gang of perhaps ten men, dark skinned like myself, but less
hairy; tall, lanky, with long legs and arms that swung down like tree branches,
their bodies bare except for animal-skin loin cloths and painted red ochre and
white ash geometric designs on their chests and faces, and vicious pointed
bones jabbed through their ear lobes and noses.
As the apparent
leader, with a mass of black feathers woven into his shock of ruddy hair, poked
at me with a pointed stick, I passed out.
Nerdvark wrote 435 words in 1 hour (for AS students, it would have to be 600 - 900 words), including taking time to follow the five-step writing process:
- pre-write - read the question carefully,
- do a quick plan (Nerdvark did a spider diagram to make sure he was mentioning all five senses in his descriptive piece, and using a very short time span. You'll notice that he also paid attention to atmosphere, and has a switch part way through, from a pleasant atmosphere of a welcoming island where he feels relieved to be safe, to a dangerous island where he is under attack, but there is a bit of foreshadowing in the diction at the beginning of the passage. All this comes from planning.),
- draft (Nerdvark wrote like crazy for about 45 minutes without stopping - he knew what he was aiming for because he read the question carefully and did a good plan, and he knew he'd have time to revise and edit before handing in his paper.)
- revise (Nerdvark ended up with too many words at first, in other words he was wordy, and had to revise it to be more succinct and more clear. He also tends to be a bit repetitive. You'll notice that the marking guide specifically mentions not to be repetitive. Don't be repetitive. Nerdvark crossed out the repeated bits when he revised the piece.),
- and a final edit for errors (in the marking guide it says "linguistically strong and accurate"; i.e. no errors.)
For more on the writing process, click here: THE WRITING PROCESS
For more on descriptive writing, click here: FIVE KINDS OF IMAGERY
Nardvark has forgotten that they are having a competition and after reading Nerdvark's entry, asked if he could have his iPad and all his leftovers from the fridge if he doesn't survive the assault.
Nardvark has forgotten that they are having a competition and after reading Nerdvark's entry, asked if he could have his iPad and all his leftovers from the fridge if he doesn't survive the assault.
THANKS FOR READING! You've studied hard... time for a study break! Written by K.I. Borrowman
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